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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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While there is no doubt that our past is what shapes today’s reality, studying
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 as a school
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 might not be necessary.
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 some people believe that all schools should focus on teaching students about their
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, I would argue that there are many other more crucial
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 Science and Technology. On the one hand,
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those
 who believe
History
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 is a vital
subject
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 might argue that it teaches us about our ancestors. While it can be true, the main focus of
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 is some events that already happened in the past.
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, If all schools focused on teaching
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 and neglected other far more necessary
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, the students would not be able to develop and improve their own future.
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, my view is that focusing on other curriculums that
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 more scientific data and technology-related information, is much more needed at the moment. Because it can help the students, by preparing them for their future studies
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society.
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, if we did not expand our knowledge regarding technical issues, we would not have discovered many of today’s gadgets. Despite the significance of
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 as a
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, it is still not included in many universities' majors, unlike Science,
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, and technology. In conclusion, All
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 are important, despite the importance of studying
History
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 which tells us about what has happened before. It is my firm belief that we need to keep the spot on
subjects
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 that affect both our present and future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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