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What are the advantages and disadvantages of Social Media?

#media
İn recent years face to face
meeting
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 have declined
due
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 the increasing share of
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social
 media
such
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us
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Facebook
, Instagram and
Twitter
 use. I think that
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social
 media is
developting
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developing
 very fastly and it leads to an increase in disadvantages.
Firstly
,
growth
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 of
Twitter
 and
Facebook
 users
cause
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 a decrease in
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face-to-face
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the face
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face- to-face
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 meetings.
As a result
, some problems increase. For
excample
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, people become colder as kinship ties and the traditions of visiting each other's homes diminish.
Secondly
, a very big problem is the alienation of
children
 from society. A few years ago,
children
 used to play together in the yard. They were
playing
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 football,
voleyball
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volleyball
 and other
diferrent
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different
 games together, which made the
children
 more connected to each other. Live communication is important in the
all-round
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 development of
children
. Right now, many
children
 are spending their time on Instagram,
Facebook
 and
Twitter
.
On the other hand
, Of course,
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social
madia
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media
 has its advantages. It seems one of the
advetages
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advantages
 of
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social
medias
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 is that When you live in another country, you can easily communicate with your family via video.
Additionally
, now social networks play an important role in saving time and delivering job advertisements to more people. In conclusion,
Downsides
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 of
this
 propensity outweigh its merits.
However
,
Twitter
, Instagram,
Facebook
 and other social
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media
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medias
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 play an important role if it is used for business purposes, not for personal life.
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