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Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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There has been a discussion about climate
change
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, where a few numbers of
people
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 think that changes in climate
change
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 policies will affect their business, other
people
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,
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, have a notion that these will bring new growth in the line of work. I believe we should make business in a way that will give benefit
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humans and nature.
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, considering changes in rules from the government, manufacturing companies, who are arguably the largest contributors to greenhouse gas emissions, have to
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 their production process.
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, the new alteration will cost them a fortune, as they have to reform the overall factories.
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- the fossil fuel car manufacturing companies will suffer the most, they need to invest in research and make modifications to their systems.
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, they have to tackle the sales, a
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majority of
people
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 are buying more electric cars as they are considered eco-friendly.
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, business-minded
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 are making a profit with the help of regulations imposed for global warming control. There is an adequate number of start-ups, which are doing innovations to overcome the issue of air pollution.
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, vegan attraction is proliferated.
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, almost null dangerous substances get
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 while making vegan food.
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- the startup, in my area is making a vegan burger patty from vegetables they grow in their indoor farming chamber.
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, the use of a pesticide affecting the environment is near absolute zero, and
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, they are making good money out of it. In conclusion, there are businesses which can grow economically with reforms of climate
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, some number of old businesses can get hurt. I believe, in
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 technological era, we need to upgrade ourselves to make a more sustainable lifestyle,
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 getting the perfect balance of environment and technology.
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