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In many countries, plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish. They cause water and land pollution, and so they should be banned. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#countries #plastic #bags #source #rubbish #water #land #pollution
Environmental pollution is one of the most serious
issue
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 which it is human-induced.
Although
this
 situation depends on various factors, especially
plastic
bags
 are common pollutants
for
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 nature.
However
, these materials are very hard to dispense in nature and
its
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their
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 residues are to remain in soil and
water
 without decomposing. Naturally, all these scientific facts render that
plastic
-based
bags
 are not allowed to use
for
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today. There are a lot of scientific studies which they prove that
plastic
bags
 are
hazard
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a hazard
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for
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 the natural habitat. A study that was conducted, in 2018, by Toronto University showed that the level of microplastic residues in
water
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the water
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 had been at peril point. Another result of
this
 situation was that tiny
plastic
particules
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particles
 had been found in
circular
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the circular
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 system of marine animals. Unfortunately,
this
deteroriation
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deterioration
determination
 for
water
 habitat will bring about a
massively
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 extinction. On the other side,
negative
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 effects of
plastic
bags
 are not limited excluding
water
 as well. As another example is
about
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plants which
they
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have a quite important position. As it is well known, plants are
key
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element
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 which they make the
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lives
lifes
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lives
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it
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possible. What is more, since
all natural
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 systems are connected with each other
such
 as aqua and ground ecosystem, to be broken
this
 cycle or harmed in some cases will
threat
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 the plant
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life
lives
lifes
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lives
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. In case of being erased the plant types,
as a result
 of overmuch using
plastic
bags
, will emerge
permanantly
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permanently
 damages
for
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 human-being. To recapitulate, it is a necessity to be banned
plastic
bags
 use.
Also
, it will be a reasonable activity to be researched
plastic
 alternatives. As a promising approach, it is expected to be used the bio
metarials
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materials
instead
 of
plastic
 in order to save our world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Persistent pollutant
  • Biodegradable
  • Eco-friendly alternatives
  • Environmental impact
  • Land pollution
  • Water pollution
  • Reusable bags
  • Public awareness
  • Consumer behavior
  • Economic impact
  • Public policies
  • Innovation
  • Education and incentives
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