Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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in the classrooms, and utilizing their
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educational system would not be an exception, because the new
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, after the pandemic of Covid-19, many
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the online platforms. From the example, we can
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the school years. If all the education
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on the virtual computing systems,
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might suffer from dire consequences
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rely merely on the mentioned systems, they lose their confidence to do complex maths or analyze the problems by
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. In one study, which was conducted by Ali Forouzfar and his team in 2018, the statistics revealed that
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who were more
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would suffer from
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of social skills.
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cutting edge technology would assist the educational system in training
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accurate way. So they would be able to be taught more complex lessons with greater communication devices,
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it should be mentioned that moderation in
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. In conclusion, there are two opinions about
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utilizing
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computers
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for teaching purposes, which I take side with the
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group who are advocating of introducing technology for educational goals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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