some people believe that construction of new public buildings such as museums, town halls and sporting facilities is more important than renovation of the existing ones, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, public places are discussed by some individuals, some argue that old public
buildings
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should be repaired, whilst others are completely
opposite
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with
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this
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thought and support
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new modern ones.
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essay will discuss both sides and give my own perspective.
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with, there are lots of old
buildings
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around the world is located. They are some called historical
buildings
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. These are our heritage and they must be protected and should remain forever. The
world museum
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World Museum
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in Liverpool,
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, has been built for years and it is a historical building
that is
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one of the symbols of Liverpool
city
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.
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it has just been renovated inside the structure without any damage
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looks modern.
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, we all have remained a building which is a symbol of our heritage, those should
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stand for a long time.
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, some inactive public property should
remove
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from the land where they are located.
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means,
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construction is empty and useless, they might break down and rebuild a new modern building which would be more useful for neighbours.
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, old constructions have a detrimental effect on the environment with a huge carbon footprint.
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places should not exist in our beautiful world.
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,
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we must protect the huge old historical structures, the majority of old
buildings
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must be removed and rebuilt with new environmentally friendly ones. In my perspective , I completely agree with the idea of modernization which can
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two birds with one stone.
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