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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In some nations, buying a
home
 is prefered
to
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 renting one significantly. It might be in order to
having
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 a
home
 from own could make
people
 far from
stress
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 of moving or other stressful conditions, which I find
it
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more helpful and positive rather than renting a
home
. Nowadays, due to
soaring
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inflation
 rate
owing
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owning
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 a
home
 could be more economical. It is undeniable that there is an
increasingly
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inflation
 in almost most countries, which leads to getting more expensive in the cost of renting and buying an
accomodation
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accommodation
. So it is needed to buy a
house
,
firstly
, to keep the value of assets and
secondly
, not to be concerned and stressed of rising the rent prices of houses.
Although
 in some countries there is no
any
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inflation
 for costs of renting a flat, having a
home
from
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 your own gives you more opportunity to design and refurbish that as you intend.
People
 find it so enjoyable to paint, build, change and design their own
apartment
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apartments
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 based on their desires, which
it
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might not be possible for whom
rent
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to rent
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.
Hence
,
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owning
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owing
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owning
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 a
house
 gives
people
 more
independency
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independence
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 to do whatever they want with it,
such
 as repainting,
equiping
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equipping
 that with new facilities and making that refurbished. In conclusion, I believe that buying a
house
 would have more positive aspects. Not only there would no
any
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concern
of
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about
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inflation
 to afford to rent an
appartment
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apartment
, but
also
 makes
people
 pleased
of
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 their abilities which they have to alter their own
house
 as they want.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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