The society would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. Do you agree or disagree?

Advertising has become
the
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essential role in society for many years whether
people
like it or not. Mostly,
people
find it annoying and disturbing and others think that if all
diversites
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diversity
diversities
of advertising are banned from society, it would be really enjoyful and bring many benefits to them.
However
, I don't accept the idea of
this
and explain the reasons why advertising should not be banned and describe which important parts of the roles are contributed by it. From the view of finance, it can be said that advertisements are
main
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ingredients of the businesses and supporters of many
entertaiment
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entertainment
industries.
For Example
, TV Channels and TV Programmes are mainly
depended
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dependent
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on the funds from
commercial
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commercials
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and
as a result
,
people
can enjoy series and shows with the ease of minimum cost and sometimes free.
Also
, it provides many employments to
people
these days as technology developed so
much
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people
can now become social influencers and
youtubers
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YouTubers
whose income are
maily
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mainly
come from the advertising.
Furthermore
,
that is
not always true
adverstiements
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advertisements
are waste of time and useless all the time because they help us to find the things we need and often show us new interests that can intrigue
our
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us
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amusement. But there are
also
bad things related to
this
phenomenon like
interruputing
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interrupting
everytime
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when we focus on something
especially
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,especially
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when we are into the TV shows and it suddenly turns out with the commercial time. Another worst thing is phone advertising that
are
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is
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basically breaking other
people
's privacy and sometimes
damaing
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damaging
business
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the business
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opportunities of others because
chaches
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chances
churches
are likely to miss with a split
of
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second
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. To conclude, advertising come along with pros and cons but
it's
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its
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advantages are
outweighting
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outweighing
it's
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its
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drawbacks.
Moreover
, all types of advertising are not troubling
people
but
somes
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some
are.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • unnecessary expenditure
  • critical source
  • informed choices
  • misleading
  • exaggerate
  • survival
  • target audience
  • environmental degradation
  • disposal
  • art and expression
  • social and cultural value
  • commercial intent
  • reasoned conclusion
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