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Some people believe that educational qualifications will always bring success in life. Other people say that educational qualifications do not necessarily bring success. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is a huge group of people who believe having educational qualifications is equal to success and there is another group that would disagree with that
opinion
. The
first
 idea usually come out from parents.They think that having degrees would easily provide a job and
therefore
 a successful life.
For example
, my grandfather was hired in an office with a bachelor's degree in accounting around sixty years ago and he was really happy in his life. The
second
opinion
that is
 usually the belief of youths claims that in 21st-century university or other educational institute qualifications do not necessarily provide a job offer.They say you should learn skills and build up your own career and it's better to invest your time in learning thos materials rather than just passing exams. My brother would agree with the
second
opinion
 and he started learning to program,
currently
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 he is a successful coder, heading the web department in the company. In my
opinion
, trying to have educational qualifications is a better way of understanding aspects but in ,universities they teach from the text and it's not always practical and not true in the real world. It's good to learn practical approaches
besides
 university education.
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