The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage

of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years

2002 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The Bar Chart illustrates the percentage of
computer
ownership
by population and by the level of education between the years 2002 and 2010. The
ownership
by the population recorded a noticeable growth since 2002. From 58% in 2002 to almost 80% in 2010.
This
increment steadily continues over the years. Which showed how important technology impacted daily life. From 2004 to 2008 the
ownership
shot up from about 60% to around 70%,
likewise
in 2010 make the total increased by about 20% since the survey started in 2002.
Computer
Ownership
by the level of education was divided into 5 categories. The highest percentage, which had significant
ownership
of
the
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computer
was a Postgraduate qualification, showed almost 80% in 2008, and 95% in 2010, followed by
Bachelor
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degree and college students that contribute
to
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85% and 90% in 2010, a bit lower in 2008 for about 50% for college student and 70% by Bachelor degree.
On the other hand
, the
last
2 lowest
ownership
was High
school
graduate
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and No high
school
diploma which contributed from 15% and 35% in 2008 and became doubled growth in 2010 to 43% for No high
school
, and 65% for
the
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high
school
graduate. In General, the consumption of the
Computer
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has become compulsory for the current generation. Based on the Chart, it was proven that the
ownership
increased over the years. There's no doubt that the evolution of technology and
computer
will
also
increase the need for computers in our society.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, ownership, school with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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