Films and computer games containing violence are popular. Some people say they have negative effects on society and should be banned. Others say they are just harmless relaxation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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like playing computer
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or watching films with violent plots in our modern society. The issue
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whether or not these should be banned because they are harmful has triggered heated discussion. In my view,
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harmful effects on
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, restricting
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kind of recreation is better than
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who are
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often
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in films or virtual
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are more likely to simulate these violent
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, especially the
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often don't do not have
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worldview, if they watch more violent scenes in entertainment, they may think that
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is a good way to solve problems or be a
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, more than twenty years ago,
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when many Hong Kong movies containing
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Chinese society, the rate of
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increased
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evidently dramatically
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instances are rare exceptions and most individuals who watch violent content do not imitate these actions.
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, many
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think that they are only for fun to watch
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films or play
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games
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which can relax
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kinds of violent entertainment can be relaxing. and The individuals
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who are
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cannot distinguish the virtual plots from
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reality are rare exceptions. For most,
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violent scenes make the story in
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film or game more compelling completed and
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attractive, and
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watching or playing them,
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viewers can
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their real life and
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enjoy
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an a
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feeling of
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excitement exciting
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today are under
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competition than ever before always
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at work or study
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stresses school
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effective way to release their
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pressure. Recent research has shown that
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and movies featuring violent content allow audiences to de-stress better than other forms of entertainment
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • aggressive behavior
  • glorify
  • artistic expression
  • pent-up emotions
  • media consumption
  • model for conflict resolution
  • fiction vs. reality
  • outlet for frustration
  • conclusive evidence
  • social influences
  • real-world aggression
  • interaction
  • imitation
  • controlled environment
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