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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise.To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements

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Internet
 is a
bouderless
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borderless
 system, it connects
people
 around the world within one platform.
However
,
users
 are allowed to join where ever they are.
This
 feature can reduce physical contact between humankind. They can communicate with each other by just staying at home.
Therefore
, the reduction of
socialism
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skill
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 will
be
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occured
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occurred
. Ignorant of some important manners caused by lacking
of
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physical
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 meeting. Examined at personalities of
people
. The connecting ability of
internet
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 can match
users
those
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 have the same habit and personal. The Distant between physical
people
 around
internet
users
 will be large. They can stay at home, talk about their
interested
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 topic with others
in
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 the
internet
 and ignore touchable social activities. Differences between the nearest
people
 will be extended if
users
 have friends
those
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 live
at
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 the
opporsite
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opposite
 side of the world. Normal
awaking
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 time might
chage
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change
charge
 and
distinctive
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 from their hometown.
At
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this
 scenario,
internet
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 user will be
the
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 absolutely isolated person.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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