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In the future, it seems more difficult to live on the earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planet to live such as Mars To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days,
an
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 existence of
life
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in
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on
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other
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another
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planet
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planets
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 is heated controversy in the whole world. In the years to come, it is predicted that people’s
lives
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 will seemingly face
with
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apply
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some difficulties on the earth. There is a common belief that more budget and funding should invest
on
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in
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 investigating to
discovery
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discover
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the
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 possibility of
life
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 on the alien
planet
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. I am convinced that the critical environmental issues may lead individuals to live
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on other
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other
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another planet
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planet
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,
therefore
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 it is essential to do research exactly. Indeed, individuals’
lives
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involved
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are involved
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 in some serious environmental problems, one of the most critical issues would
deplete
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depletion
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the
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of the
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 ozone layer. The number of means of transportation
are
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is
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 increasing on the street that these are emitting
the
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a
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 huge amount of the pollutants into
air
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the air
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 daily.
as a result
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, it will apparently cause global warming and
also
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 rising sea level, so inhabitants’
lives
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 will be prone to destroying on the current
planet
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.
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,
farmer
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farmers
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 and
manufacturer
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manufacturers
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 may bring about
the
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apply
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soil
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 erosion.
The
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apply
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Heavy machinery like tractors which
has
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have
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 been
using
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used
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 for cultivation and
also
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 cutting down trees by the large company can lead to
the
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apply
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soil
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 erosion which is unsuitable for growing. As a consequence, these activities can ruin our earth that future
generation
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generations
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 for
their
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the
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 rest of
life
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 will have to need to live on
alien
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an alien
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planet
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planets
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.
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, spending money in order to study the existence of
life
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 on other
plant
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plants
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 is crucial because scientists and pioneer companies would facilitate access to
this
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 accomplishment. Take NASA as an example, has been investing
huge
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a huge
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 amount of money in
this
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 innovative project that can find an appropriate
soil
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 on the MARS to cultivate.
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, these steps can create a new way to live
on
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in
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alien
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an alien
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 environment. In conclusion, it is inevitable that our
planet
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overwhelmed
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is overwhelmed
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 with a lot of critical concerns
such
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 as depleting
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer and
soil
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 erosion.
Besides
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this
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, investing budget
on
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in
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other plant
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another plant
other plants
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 will create an innovative way to preserve
new
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the new
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 generation’s
lives
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 in the future.
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