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Some people today believe that world’s population increase is unsustainable and will eventually lead to global crisis. Other people believe that world population increase is necessary as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued, that the rise in the world
population
 has become a problem. Many people consider
this
 phenomenon is leading to the deployment of a natural resource while others see it as an opportunity for the economy and
society
 to flourish. From my personal point of view, I do agree with the statement that the over-
population
 of the planet will create irreversible damage in the long term. Let us consider the main reason why there is an
increase
 in the world
population
. Ever since, science has considerably developed people have started to live longer because they don'
t
 get ill, and
thus
 don'
t
 die.
Moreover
, because of the rapid growth of communities in the
last
 50
years
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 people have started to destroy the natural habitat to build houses and cities to cope with the overwhelming need to provide housing, offices and other institutions to accommodate the ageing
population
.
Furthermore
, an
increase
 in individuals will provide fresh ideas and skills to
society
 and
also
, science.
In addition
, the economic level will significantly
increase
 the workforce which means an
increase
 in the goods, materials and more comfort and development for the
society
 in general. More professionals, scientists, technicians and workers will be available to take over for the elderly. In my opinion, I don'
t
 really agree with the
last
 statement as I have said earlier communities are growing worldwide with an older
population
 that soon will require more attention and won'
t
 be able to produce or contribute to the development of
society
 or economy. To conclude, an
increase
 in the world
population
 will cause more damage than benefits, and
also
 due to ageing ,
population
 the economic and social development at some point will be stock and possible go in reverse.
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