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The essay gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

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The bar chart provides information about the proportion of
female
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females
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 into higher education in the UK, USA, Australia, South Korea and France over the course of 35 years. Overall, it is clear that Australia
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 was higher, while the rate of South Korea was the lowest among these five countries
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 the period. Analyzing the layouts of the bar chart in more detail, there
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 significant changes in the UK and USA. In 1980, the indication of women going into higher education in the UK and USA were nearly 35% and 55% respectively. These figures increased by almost 3% in 2015. Turning to the other figures, in 1980, the percentage of South Korea was almost 15%, being lower
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 in 2015. The proportion of France was just under
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half in 1980 and rose by approximately 3% in 2015.
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, the figure for Australia remained stable, hovering at around three-fifth between 1980 and 2015.
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