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Nowadays,many people choose to be self-employed, than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

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In the past few years, more and more people prefer to be self-employed
instead
 of having a certain job
that is
 given by a self-industry or government. There are understandable reasons for
such
 situations, though. I would
also
 discuss some disadvantages
about
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 it.
One
 of the reasons may be the low employment rate in recent years due to the pandemic.
Also
, as the easier enquiring for a mobile phone and well-developed wireless Internet, it is convenient to build up
one
's own career. Some common self-employers
such
like
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as
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 independent
medias
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 individual video
creator
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 and Youtuber are all generated by technology. These are all online
work
 which won't be
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effect
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 by the guarantee. Despite
this
, there are
also
 some negativities of these
free-occupations
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.
Firstly
, these jobs are unstable. Without
the
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 certain level of income and regular
work
 time sche dual, they may influence the quality of
one
's life.
Furthermore
, some of the
work
are
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 not meant for
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the long-term
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long-term
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long term
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, the quit of
these
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work
 is inevitable while the experience is not suitable for Jobs in companies or organizations and
end
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ends
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 up being unemployed.
Finally
, self-employment has no protection by the
labor
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 law, which means there will be no guarantee for the basic wage. All in all, self-employment seems to be a popular choice recently, but there are still many problems for
one
to
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starting
such
 a career.
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