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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #sense #competition #children #co-operate #adults
When it comes to teaching
children
,
people
 have different opinions about whether competition should be put into their
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 early age, while others argue that rather than competing
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 other they should be
teached
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 to interrupt and help each other. In my opinion, I am more prefer
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the
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 one because by teaching co-operation to them in their childhood, they will become reasonable and understandable
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 everyone when they become adults. There are many benefits of getting teamwork habits
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 young age.
Firstly
, there are more likely to have less jealousy in co-operative
people
 as they are all together working hard to achieve their goals. But what if adults teach young
people
 to compete with each other in their childhood age, there are possibilities that their innocent mind can be stained with jealousy which is the
wrost
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worst
 feeling that can take their host into the dark and bad things and nobody should have.
Also
, they will know how to communicate with each other and negotiate with their parents or elders to get the things
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 they want peacefully.
Lastly
, they can be successful and lovely leaders whose employees respect because everybody
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 the person who
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 the most skill in teamwork in
business
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 field.
On the other hand
, I think competition
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 some advantages
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 its own.
To begin
 with,
children
 who have the will of competing are the ones who try harder and harder to get their goals meet.
Therefore
, they will not get easily bored and will not be lazy over something that can disturb them.
Moreover
, they always look upon their rivals to not get lower marks or
beaten
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 by them. So it has the most strong effect
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motiviations
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motivations
motivation
 for
children
.
However
,
this
 will lead
children
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 when they cannot achieve a better result with high
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expectations
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. Overall, it can be said that cooperation can lead
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children
 to become better leaders and competition is the best to get
motivations
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motivation
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 for young
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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