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in the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. They only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicles #passengers
With the development of
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 it is expected to become at significant levels in
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 of transportation. Especially, autonomous
vehicles
 have a serious share
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this
 category. Nowadays many brands, which
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are sector
leader
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, have been keeping to own
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 in
this
 domain for nearly two decades. In
next
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 coming time period, many
vehicles
 will have to embrace autonomous features at various stages.  Nowadays it has been discussed the negative and positive
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vehicles
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are self-control. Given the useful features, the mitigation
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 human-induced traffic accidents can be assessed as one of the best examples to be given at
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As a result
, many
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 could be saved thanks to
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this
 technology. Another promising expectation in
this
 context, since these
vehicles
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, traffic congestion will decrease up to a degree or remove
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completely
. On the other side, in spite of all
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sides
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above
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, there are some
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undesired consequences of
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 autonomous
vehicles
 as well.
For example
, it is counted that taxi drivers will expose to harsh results. According to the projections made by business analysts, unemployment rates
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transportation
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 sector will rise in
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 of not being taken
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In addition
 to that, another potential threat is
software
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 of
vehicles
. In case of emerging
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unexpected software problems,
such
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cause
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halt the whole system, it is possible to happen the traffic accidents. Eventually, when it is taken into
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positive
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 and negative
sides
 of driverless
vehicles
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 technologies, from my point of view, beneficial features are more than negative
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.
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 opine that
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vehicles
 will play very important roles in our
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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