Some people believe that engaging in an active pastime does more to develop children`s life skills than time spent reading. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most people believe that an
acitve
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active
pastime
for children can develop their
skill
rather than spending time on reading.
This
essay totally agrees with that statement. I believe that
an
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active
pastime
skills
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skill
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provides
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a
child
to be creative and helps them to achieve
goal
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a goal
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rather than reading a book.
Childrens
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Children's
reading a book and considering it as
skill
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a skill
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has less actual experience than
childrens
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children
taking part in
an
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active
skill
making.
This
may cause children to be less creative and interactive during an event.
This
has happened to my
cousion
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cousin
Rohit. He is a very good reader and due to inexperience
of
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certain
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situation
situations
situtation
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he
was always rings
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me up and seeks an
advise
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. Now he regrets not having to spend
to
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too
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much time
on
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cultivating an active
pastime
skill
making. An active
pastime
can create
right
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the right
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mindset for younger
ones
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life. It can
also
help them to understand,
develope
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develop
and
sometime
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sometimes
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also
driven them making a good carrier in it.
For
instance
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a
16 year
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child
had made a carrier out of his active past time
skill
by being on a creative VFX team in one of
most
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desired
movie
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KGF and he was
also
appriciated
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appreciated
and
also
had given different
oppurchunities
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opportunities
as well. To sum it up,
pastime
skills
tends
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to be a stepping stone
of
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success for a
child
. It
outbrings
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out brings
a
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child
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child's
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creativity and helps him to
intreact
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interact
more with a
clearmind
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clear mind
set rather than not being able to have an actual experience.
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