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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this a positive or negative situation?

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Nowadays, the issue of being an owner of a house or
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apartments
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 is a really controversial
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. In some
states
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 it is believed that
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owning
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owing
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owning
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 your own
home
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 is very significant for a
person
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’s living and it is better than
to rent
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 a
home
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. In
this
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 I will explain why it is better for a man to own a
home
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 than to rent it and do I think it is a good opinion or
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. In some
countries
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 people think that having your own
property
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 is better than renting it.
This
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 belief might be caused by a serious number of reasons. The most important
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 is that a
person
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 who
own
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 a house or a flat has a stable
life
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 without depending on what other people can think or do.
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, there is no need to think
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 to take money for a rental
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 every month or will you have a place to live after the end of the validity of the lease agreement.
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, a
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 can build more long-term
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 plans if he owns his own
home
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. In my opinion,
this
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 belief has more perks and advantages than drawbacks, so
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it is a positive
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. Having your own
property
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 allows an individual to have freedom of decisions and actions. If you have a desire to buy a pet or to change a mirror in a bedroom, you do not have to ask an owner for
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permission. So that, a
person
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 is not limited by what others want and think and can rule
a
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life
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 on his own. To sum up,
an
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 opinion that it is really important for an individual to own a
property
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 is caused by a great number of reasons, the most important
from
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 which is a stable
life
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. I admit
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 belief to be a positive
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 because a
person
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 who has his own
property
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 is free to make decisions without asking
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 allowance from others.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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