Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important tha History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have various opinions about
subjects
like
history
,
science
and
technology
. Some people claim that
history
is the most crucial subject for
human
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
show examples
as it reflects how our ancestors have developed and survived while others point out that we should be thinking to move forward
instead
of learning how we have evolved in the past. In my opinion, I believe that
history
is important but academic
subjects
such
as
science
and
technology
are more important. On the one hand, supporters of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
history
points
Change the verb form
point
show examples
out that there are several reasons why students should not ignore
history
.
Firstly
, we can learn many things that we don't have a chance to see or hear from
history
and mistakes
which
Correct word choice
that
show examples
our ancestors have made.
For example
, the advanced navigation skills used in oceans can be learnt through
history
and we can correct the wrong superstitions that ancient people had.
Moreover
, we might even get
motivations
Fix the agreement mistake
motivation
show examples
if we know our grandparents and grand-grand parents tried so hard not to get taken our lands by other nations.
On the other hand
, academic
subjects
like
science
and
technology
have contributed
as
Change preposition
apply
show examples
huge parts
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
the education system
to
Change preposition
of
show examples
schools and universities. Without the help of those
subjects
, our society would not be developed as nowadays.
Also
, only those
subjects
can help the students to become
who
Change the pronoun
whom
show examples
they want to be and great job positions like scientists, engineers and IT specialists can
be become
Change to the active voice
become
show examples
through those
subjects
as they are the main basic
principal
Correct your spelling
principle
show examples
rules of those.
Lastly
, the current situations like catastrophic covid-19 pandemics can only be solved by
science
and
technology
. So it is best to know more and more
in
Change preposition
about
show examples
those
subjects
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
students. Overall, we can learn so much from
history
but problems and situations which we will be faced can only be overcome by new scientific facts and advanced
technology
. So I don't deny the fact that
history
is not important but
science
and
technology
are more important because of the aforementioned reasons
Submitted by ivvitest3 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: