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Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects?

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Over the past decades, the world has evolved substantially in terms of technological advancement. Using
computer
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computers
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 becomes a daily basis task and children have more exposure
with
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 computer
games
 compared to the past. There are various forces that drive
this
 issue, and several solutions should be taken into consideration. The
first
 problem
of
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 playing computer
games
 is becoming obese. Nowadays, children are more fat due to their sedentary lifestyle and
the
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lack of exercise.
For example
,
instead
 of playing outside, they tend to play
games
 or stay
indoor
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indoors
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. It may even lead them
into
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 severe diseases,
such
 as obesity and heart attack.
Moreover
, children become rude and
inability
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the inability
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of
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communication
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 because of the action
games
' competitive behaviours.
Additionally
, they are in danger of failing exams since they are apathetic
of
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 their studies. Despite the fact that following the cutting-edge technology is beneficial, there are more things that cannot
compared
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be compared
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 with
games
, like attending classes and taking care of family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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