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Your landlord is asking to increase the rent. Write a letter to him. In your letter, you should tell: • why you think the rent shouldn't be increased • what you will do if it is increased

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Dear Friend I desire to invite you for participating in the festival
conducting
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conducted
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 in my City. Thrissur Pooram is
well-known
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a well-known
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 Temple festival in India. The History
start
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starts
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from
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in
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14th
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the 14th
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 Century,
On the other hand
, multiple groups
temples
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of temples
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 will involve in the Festival,
For
Instance
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,Instance
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 southern group and
northern
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the northern
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 group
This
 festival
occurring
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occurs
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 every year month of November
as well as events
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, as well as events,
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 rushing like 3 days
Secondly
,
There
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there
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 are lots of attractions and activities
in
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at
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this
 festival, Especially more
then
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than
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 hundred elephants
involves
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involved
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 in each group,
Although
 Fireworks
is
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are
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spectacular
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a spectacular
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 experience for everyone, Musical instruments will use by artists
i
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I
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 can say undoubtedly it will be great
moments
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moment
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 in your life,
Moreover
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,Moreover
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 traditional performances
is
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are
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 there
such
 as Leopard game
Next
, I will make the arrangement for
meeting
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a meeting
the meeting
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 in the temple clearly you can explore the important occasion in your life,
In
addition
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,addition
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 you can stay
with
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at
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 my home
also
 Yours Lovingly,
Ramshad
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Rashad
Rams had
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
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