Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that if the economic contribution is consistent with the length of labour timesheet among different countries. In my opinion that the conclusion is superficial without sufficient analysis from different perspectives. In

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is not a positive relation to the success

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the economy. On one hand, working hard is encouraged in

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society, which easily links to long working

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. Undoubtedly, the possibility of economic success by hard-working would be higher than others. To be more precise, the salary for workers in a factory is normally calculated with a basic salary plus overtime salary according to their actual working

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, as long as more work

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economic income would be more.

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, a musician spent one year writing a song, when the song has been published but has no revenue because it’s not buy-in in the market. From another perspective, the yield rate is an important indicator to evaluate the success of a business by economists.

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, there are several cases that proved the most eye-catching business case are always those returned in short term.

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, JD corporation (China Amazon) was established in 1998, successfully listed in public stock in 2014, and it’s profitable in 2017. Meanwhile, JD’s competitor PDD was established in 2015, successfully listed in public stock in 2016, and achieved profitability in quarter one of 2021, PDD took six years to get profit, which is less than 11 years compared with JD which took 17 years.

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restaurant

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appliances reduced the rework rate, scrap rate and the fluctuation

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labour cost. To sum up, it’s too general to evaluate the economic performance of a country upon

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spent on work, I support assessing the economic indicator in a practical way from different perspectives.

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Topic Vocabulary:

economic success
working hours
productivity
sustainable development
work-life balance
labor laws
efficiency
gross domestic product (GDP)
burnout
occupational health
technological innovation
industrialized nations
emerging economies
workforce
competitiveness
workplace culture
employee turnover
quality of life

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Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this

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You bought a music concert ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •say about the concert •say why you are unable to go •inform how your friend can receive the ticket

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