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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can cause lack of sleep? What can be done about lack of sleep?

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These days, the majority of people struggle with insufficient sleep because of a variety of reasons. The biggest problems related to
this
 epidemic are lack of concentration and the increasing rate of diseases.
Therefore
, introducing some solutions
such
 as doing a specific kind of sports or decreasing the time of using mobile phones play crucial roles to combat
this
 issue.
To begin
 with, the two most major problems which are affected by lack of sleep are productivity and health. Obviously, all of us during the day do different mental or physical activities, all of them need more or less enough concentration, so high-quality sleep has an impact on our efficiency directly.
Moreover
, unfortunately, people have surfed the net since a couple of years ago due to improving the technology, so the rate of using mobile phones has been increasing even in the bed.
For instance
, in my country, the percentage of spending time with self-phone
is twice compare
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 two years ago.
Therefore
, sleeplessness creates bad conditions for communities according to these issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Insomnia
  • Sleep deprivation
  • Sleep disorders
  • Sleep quality
  • Fatigue
  • Exhaustion
  • Restless
  • Restorative sleep
  • REM sleep
  • Circadian rhythm
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Napping
  • Sleep duration
  • Melatonin
  • Sleep-inducing
  • Drowsiness
  • Sleep disturbances
  • Obstructive sleep apnea
  • Snoring
  • Sleepwalking
  • Sleep talking
  • Shift work
  • Sleeping pills
  • Sleep aid
  • Relaxation techniques
  • Meditation
  • Deep breathing
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