Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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to do in his free time. people think seeing the
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in the
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than watching it
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the phone. in
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perfere
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them. while the
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choses
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the tv with
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one
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get married like to watch romantic
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films
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together
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netflix
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at home. And now adag all the generation have
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laptop
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it is easy to them to see what they Want.
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expensive to go to
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now
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. so
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a lot
of generation
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prefer
to use they own Electric like phone or laptop. New
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movie
come out and it was so expensive .For
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,
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man Cost 20$. saving the money so importing now a dag to the young people.
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,
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getting
all the new updates
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and easy, so you
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don't
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for
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expensive
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film
. saving more is so important now
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. In
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conclusion
, watching
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films
film
filme
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from
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laptop
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or
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the
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its
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enjoyable in both
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teenager
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prefer
to Watch it in the
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good
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style for them while the older
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prefer
at
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home when
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the
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get older
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saving money
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is
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thing now a dag.
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  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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