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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Watching movie is the best thing that
the
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a
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 person
like
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likes
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 to do in his free time. people think seeing the
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Filme
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film
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 in the
cinema
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 is
enjoyable
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more enjoyable
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 than watching it
in
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on
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 the phone. in
this
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essay
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 we will
discuse
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discuss
 both
Viewe
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View
 in
details
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detail
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.
Body paragraph 1
First
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 of all, it
is
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depent
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dependent
depend
 on the age,
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teenager
teenger
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the teenger
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perfere
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prefer
preferred
 to watch the movie in the
cinema
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 as it is Enjoyable
to
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for
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 them. while the
olders
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older
choses
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chooses
 to see it at home
from
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on
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 the tv with
the
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their
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lover
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loved
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one
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apply
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.
For Example
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, mennesker when
the
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they
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 get married like to watch romantic
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filme
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films
togther
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together
from
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on
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netflix
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Netflix
NetFlix
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 at home. And now adag all the generation have
lapto
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laptop
 and
smart phone
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smartphone
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 it is easy to them to see what they Want.
Body paragraph 2
Second
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, it
to
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too
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 expensive to go to
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cinema
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the cinema
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 now
adag
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dag
. so
alot
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a lot
 of generation
perfer
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prefer
 to use they own Electric like phone or laptop. New
moive
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movie
 come out and it was so expensive .For
instant
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an instant
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,
spider
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a spider
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 man Cost 20$. saving the money so importing now a dag to the young people.
Body paragraph 3
Furthermore
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,
geting
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getting
 all the new updates
filme
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 from online
free
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is free
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 and easy, so you
dont
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don't
 need to buy
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A lot
Alot
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a Alot
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for
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of
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 expensive
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filme
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film
. saving more is so important now
adag
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dag
.
Conclusion
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conclution
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conclusion
, watching
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films
film
filme
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a filme
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from
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on
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laptop
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a laptop
the laptop
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 or
in
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at
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 the
cinema
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its
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is
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 enjoyable in both
way
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ways
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.
teenger
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teenager
perfer
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prefer
 to Watch it in the
cinema
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 as it is
good
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a good
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 style for them while the older
perfer
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prefer
at
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it at
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 home when
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they
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the
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they
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 get older
In my opinion
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, In my opinion,
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 saving money
it
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apply
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is
important
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the important
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 thing now a dag.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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