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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can government and individuals take to tackle the issue.

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The
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 line graph depicts the proportion of households which owned electrical appliances in one nation between 1920 and 2019 while the
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 weekly which spend on the housework during the same period. Overall, as the percentage of electrical appliances ownership increased, the amount of time spent on housework decreased. Focusing on the
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owned was 40 per
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 incline from 70 to 65 per
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 graph, the amount of weekly time spent doing housework fell from 50 hours to about 15 hours between 1920 and 1980. Afterwards, it only experienced a small drop to 10 hours in 2019.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • burning of fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • trap heat
  • atmosphere
  • deforestation
  • carbon dioxide
  • greenhouse effect
  • industrial activities
  • agricultural practices
  • carbon emissions
  • renewable energy
  • environmental regulations
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • lifestyle changes
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • conserving energy
  • LED bulbs
  • plant-based diet
  • raising awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • mitigate
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