In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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It is true that when the technology is developed, many advanced developments have
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in agriculture to produce crops, fruits, and vegetables
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. Despite the fact that people made farming more producible, people in the world have still problems with food
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. In
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. There are several reasons ascribed to
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problem and one of the chief issues is
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of goods from one place to another. Whatever the more products are harvested thanks to the new technology, it will not be useful if they can't be used in the needed place. Sometimes,
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costs are more expensive than the value of products which needed to deliver.
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, another reason that
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is the large money-making business companies which hold the control of the market and only sell to the places
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they can make profits and that's why regions that needed the most are not able to purchase.
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, some lands cannot cultivate any trees or plants because of the local weather and soil conditions none the less there are many improvements in farming. Turning to possible solutions,
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should spend more budgets on
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easy
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good communication and attraction of tourism.
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and building ports alongside the coasts and railroads
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goods
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more
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exports like flour, rice and vegetables which are basic daily needs of the human beings and distribute those
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low cost to the places that needed.
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, affluents should donate a little percentage of
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belongings to the poor because the research from the US shows that about five
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of the top ten
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wealth can be solved the world's hunger problems. Overall, it can be said that
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issue has happened because of the greed of
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human and can be solved if
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humans don't
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so much.
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, we should try to solve
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every possible
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to overcome
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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