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Some experts claim that most of the outstanding innovations and breakthroughs have been made by people with a high level of so-called ‘innate intelligence’.  What are the advantages and disadvantages of relying on this theory in order to succeed in life for an ordinary people?

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According to some experts, most notable ideas and breakthroughs have been created by persons who have a high level of so-called "innate intelligence”.
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 to achieve success in life for ordinary
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. The two main benefits for ordinary
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 to use the
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 that they can use it as a source of motivation and just sit and do nothing.
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, ordinary
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 who are not gifted from birth with unique genes and chromosomes can learn and work
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 they can catch up with more talented intellectuals and create new innovative and sensational inventions.
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 way, biologists can attend additional courses in biology from more experienced and professional experts.
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, they can just relax and leave the difficult task of being a scientist to smarter and more talented
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, some mathematicians become
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 they can teach other future researchers.
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, there are downsides
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 as being humiliated by smarter
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 and pissed off by parents.
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, parents can give you an
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 of excellent students to binaries.
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, other
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, they can prove that they are more developed than they are.
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 conclusion, The above
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 has advantages and disadvantages in relation to ordinary
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 of
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 outweigh its drawbacks
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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