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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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Nowadays,
people
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 choose to live in
the
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rental houses
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 of purchasing one with too much money. Most
people
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 agree and
pursuit
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with
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this
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phenomeon
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phenomenon
, but others disagree. I will discuss the negative and positive aspects below. On the one hand, it is no doubt that
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rent
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renting
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 homes mean more flexibility and freedom for youth
,
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 so that they can alter their job or move to another city anytime without any stress.
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,
people
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 will choose IKEA's
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furniture
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
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instead
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 of high value or private-design items, which are not only easy to take away but
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in
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at
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low
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a low
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 price.
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,
people
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 will have more budget to do anything their want,
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 as register
to
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 a high degree course, learn interest skills or set up
company
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a company
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,
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 because they
are not undertake
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are not undertaking
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 the pressure from
house
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 debt which we call
house
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 slave.
One
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On
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 the other hand, it is commonly believed that
rent
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 is steadily increasing during the past few years and will continue
such
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 tendency in future, which will
also
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 become economic pressure
for
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people
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. Take the
first
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-tier
cities
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,
for instance
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.
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 big
cities
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, especially the
first
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-tier
cities
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, with lots of labour pouring in, the living cost and
rent
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 are sharply rising up.
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, according to some
countries
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country's
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 traditional culture, it is an important signal that you can buy a big
house
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 in big
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cities
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city
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 to confirm you are living in a good condition and make money.
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, once you buy a
house
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, you have the chance to apply to kindergarten and primary school for your child in some countries. Under
such
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condition
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conditions
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, it is necessary to buy a home
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 it may cause overweight economic pressure. In conclusion, there are negative and positive aspects for
rent
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 homes, and
people
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 should make
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a decision
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decision
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decisions
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 regarding their pursuit and current economic condition.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial commitment
  • down payment
  • initial costs
  • allocate resources
  • maintenance costs
  • mobility
  • relocate
  • market fluctuations
  • property value
  • building equity
  • appreciate in value
  • asset
  • personalization
  • restrictions
  • rental increases
  • lease renewal
  • financial instability
  • housing budgets
  • long-term security
  • landlord
  • lease agreement
  • equity
  • substantial
  • property ownership
  • property market
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