1. Your friend recently moved to the same town where your friend lives. Please write a letter to invite your friend to go to the gym together. In your letter o describe why you go to this gym o say what part of this gym you recommend o explain why you think it is suitable for your friend

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Hi Dave, It was

an astonishing news

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to hear that you have moved to my town. It's been a long time

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since we

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haven't met each

others

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. Since I heard you are looking

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place to train for your fitness, I'd like you to recommend a gym nearby my house. I have been working out there for a year. It's really affordable and 24-hour accessible. The owner and the trainers are

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well behaved and good disciplined guys. That's the main

reasons

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why I love to go there. I was wondering

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development after joining that gym as their instructions and equipment are insane. Especially, dead-lift calories burn session

is highly recommend

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my experience, it will really

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for

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you too. It owns

private

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shower and changing rooms

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. So, you don't need to worry about the way back home with dirty clothes. It would be a great choice because you can take some rest at my house after the gym sessions.

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, we can get some good times

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playing games as we had in our colleague time. All the best, Tun Naung Win

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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185 words

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1. Your friend recently moved to the same town where your friend lives. Please write a letter to invite your friend to go to the gym together. In your letter o describe why you go to this gym o say what part of this gym you recommend o explain why you think it is suitable for your friend

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

In some countries, it can be difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience. What do you think are the causes and effects of this problem?

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your opinion.