1. Your friend recently moved to the same town where your friend lives. Please write a letter to invite your friend to go to the gym together. In your letter o describe why you go to this gym o say what part of this gym you recommend o explain why you think it is suitable for your friend

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Hi Dave, It was

an astonishing news

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to hear that you have moved to my town. It's been a long time

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since we

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haven't met each

others

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. Since I heard you are looking

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for a

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place to train for your fitness, I'd like you to recommend a gym nearby my house. I have been working out there for a year. It's really affordable and 24-hour accessible. The owner and the trainers are

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well behaved and good disciplined guys. That's the main

reasons

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why I love to go there. I was wondering

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about my

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development after joining that gym as their instructions and equipment are insane. Especially, dead-lift calories burn session

is highly recommend

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From

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my experience, it will really

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for

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you too. It owns

private

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shower and changing rooms

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. So, you don't need to worry about the way back home with dirty clothes. It would be a great choice because you can take some rest at my house after the gym sessions.

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playing games as we had in our colleague time. All the best, Tun Naung Win

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

185 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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1. Your friend recently moved to the same town where your friend lives. Please write a letter to invite your friend to go to the gym together. In your letter o describe why you go to this gym o say what part of this gym you recommend o explain why you think it is suitable for your friend

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

In many countries governments are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government money?

Some people believe that children can learn effectively by watching TV and they should be encouraged to watch TV both at home and at school.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people hol the view that it is better to buy their home rather than rent it. do you agree or disagree

In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they tried hard enough. what are the advantages and the disadvantages of giving children this message?