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University Students Are Increasingly Studying Abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
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academic learners tend to study in foreign
countries
. There are several reasons
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those decision
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;
for instance
,
ditrimental
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detrimental
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, the educational system is not effective enough to serve their need.
Hence
, some students decide to go studying
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 more than
their
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 own country. Studying abroad seems to have
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plenty of advantages but, every coin has two
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, there are
such
 disadvantages counterparts. Begin with the advantages
first
,
Firstly
,
in
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some
countries
, particularly
in
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Thailand seem to have a positive attitude
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 the
people
 who
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 studied in different territories. So,
this
 group of
people
 will gain some benefits and promotions more than those students, who
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 not, because of good creditability.
Secondly
, it is a good chance to experience a fascinating period in other
countries
. Different
people
 could lead to
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new logical thinking and lifestyle.
Thirdly
, the difference in currency is
also
 crucial.
people
 likely choose
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where
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 has a strong and high value more than their own to get wealth before they come back.
In contrast
, there are lots of expenditures that need to be considered before getting
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 a learning life in foreign
countries
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. If the budget is not enough, there would have a financial problem later. Another drawback is taking time to be familiar with the local
people
 and cultures. Some
people
 tend to be home-sick and have a
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 since they have lived for a while. In conclusion, there are pros and cons in finding experiences abroad,
somes
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some
 are following their dream and passion or
somes
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some
 are getting a good chance in their career path.
Conversely
, there are
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several things to be thinking of
such
 as financial
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 or accommodation.
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