IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5

Plastic bags, bottles, and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to slove this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #governments #individuals #slove
The advancement in technology has widened the human thinking capacity where they find solutions to make life easy.
Creation
Correct article usage
The creation
show examples
 of
plastic
 was one of the outcomes of innovation because of its durability, low cost and
ease
Correct your spelling
easy
show examples
 to use. There is a wide range of research about the negative impact of
plastic
 consumption on nature.
Hence
,
this
 essay will elaborate
the
Change preposition
on the
show examples
 harmful impact of non-bio-degradable
products
 on our surroundings and solutions to overcome the issues. On the one hand, consumers are used to artificial
products
such
 as bags, bottles and other commodities because they are cheaper than other substitutes made from different materials.
On the other hand
, producers are used to
plastic
 because of its low cost of production.
However
, environmental researchers proved with facts that
products
 made out of
plastic
 will take more than ten years to decompose. They have
further
 emphasized,
some
Correct word choice
that some
show examples
products
 combined with chemicals will not decompose at all.
For example
, marine divers found different items from the seabed that are decades old.
Moreover
,
garbage
Add an article
the garbage
show examples
 that has synthetic items has a high risk to wildlife because it does not digest after swallowing it. There are different solutions that have been taken by authorities, non-governmental organizations and the general public. The state has different regulations that bound the people to use other alternatives.
For instance
,
tax
Add an article
the tax
a tax
show examples
 imposed on
plastic
 items.
Furthermore
, providing tax benefits for people and subsidies for entrepreneurs to purchase and create
products
 using other environmentally friendly materials.
Nevertheless
, individuals have
social
Add an article
a social
show examples
 responsibility to protect their habitat for their future
generation
Fix the agreement mistake
generations
show examples
 by following reduce, reuse and recycle concept. To sum up, irrespective of rank, everyone has a duty to protect mother nature
for
Change preposition
by
show examples
 prolonging life.
Submitted by randyrush on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: