some people use social media to keep in touch with other people and news events. Do you think that the advantages of this technology out weigh its disadvantages?

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due to
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technological
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advancement
more and more
people
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that it
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negative impacts on
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present era , social
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many
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it for their personal
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benefits
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and
that
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people
understand the value of it. Nowadays
people
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hectic
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life
people
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meeting but
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or
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can talk face to face with their parents or dear ones. Even though, on
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social media
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we can get regular or
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per day
news which is
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benefit
benefits
of it. So,
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one
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relevant
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from my relative from abroad and he informed me that
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about him. so it is
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good
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to connect to
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some positive and some negative. Here, where
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way but
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people
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or
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to
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people
. When
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time
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and they west their
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is not productive for them.
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,
people
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it
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destrect
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district
people
or
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misguide
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people
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person
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privercy
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privacy
.
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,
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social
media
is
good
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plateform
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platform
and it is very
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beneficial
for
people
.
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