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some people use social media to keep in touch with other people and news events. Do you think that the advantages of this technology out weigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays,
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due to
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technological
advancment
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advancement
 more and more
people
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 are using social
media
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 for personal
use
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 as well as getting regular updates
of
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worldwide
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world wide
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worldwide
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. and
some
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time
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 its good and some
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seen
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 that it
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 negative impacts on
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 and their life. In
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 present era , social
media
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 is
one
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 kind of status for some
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 but on
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other hand
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the otherhand
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 many
people
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using
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 it for their personal
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benefits
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think
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thing
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 and
that
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people
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 understand the value of it. Nowadays
people
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use
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 it for connecting wither relative because due to
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hectic
tactic
 life
people
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 cannot get
time
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 to
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someone
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some
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someone
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one
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 or
personal
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 meeting but
socialmedia
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social media
 had provided the facility that a person who
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in
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other
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 continent and
he
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or
she
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can talk face to face with their parents or dear ones. Even though, on
socialmedia
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social media
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applications
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application
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 we can get regular or
perday
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per day
 news which is
huge
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a huge
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benifit
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benefit
benefits
 of it. So,
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anyone
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any
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one
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 can get
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relevant
 information in
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time
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. A few
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 ago
one
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 accident
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happened
happens
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 of company and after 20 minit. I got
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a call
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 from my relative from abroad and he informed me that
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 of his
friend
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friends
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 working
in
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 it please get some
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 about him. so it is
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a very
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 good
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media
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medium
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 to connect to
people
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 or regular
update
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.but every coin
have
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 two
side
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 some positive and some negative. Here, where
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use
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for
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good
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 way but
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time
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people
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use
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to
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someone
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some
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someone
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one
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or
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 social
media
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distract
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to
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people
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. When
people
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 get in touch with each other by it.
some
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time
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 a person
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use
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 it for
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a longtime
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long time
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longtime
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long time
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 and they west their
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 and
these
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time
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 is not productive for them.
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,
people
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 get regular news or update from these type of
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sometime
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,
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someone
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some
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someone
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use
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for
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destrect
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district
people
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 or
missguide
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misguide
misguided
to
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people
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 by some
fack
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fake
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 news.The video calling facility
some
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sometimes
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time
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compromising
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compromises
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person
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person's
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privercy
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privacy
.
Lastly
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,
the
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apply
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 social
media
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 is
good
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a good
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plateform
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platform
 and it is very
benifeciar
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beneficial
 for
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