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Many companies and Organisation required employees to wear uniform at work what are advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform?

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Institutions feel that their subordinates wear the
company
 oriented dress while they are
in
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 the duty.
This
 essay will discuss the positive sides of rendering specific clothes and
also
 describe the drawbacks of holding individual costumes. One of the
positive
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 is to wear
company
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 uniform can make
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them
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the
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 identity.
In other
words
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 employees use
this
 dress at the same
time
. Not only that they can uplift their value but
also
 they can build up a fruitful career. Another advantage of wearing
company
 dress can help them to get honour from the customers.
For instance
, people wearing KFC pizza
T-shirt
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 can mark the brand name of
that
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company
 where they work which can enhance the
company
's image. Human while doing their duty outside the field every
folks
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 easily knows that they are the KFC's worker which can provide them
a
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lot
 of pleasure. Despite all the positive sides using
uniform
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uniforms
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 can spoil the
institutions
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institution's
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 image if they cannot execute their employees properly.
Firstly
, workers get bored
while
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 they are
in
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dull and gloomy.
Secondly
, monotonous life
fashion
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 them worthless.
Thirdly
, they cannot get
benefit
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benefits
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while
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when
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 they
loss
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 their jobs without any benefits. Another drawback would be
this
 is not a
time consuming
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 fact where they can do their other
works
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work
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 in a very short
time
.
This
 is because
,
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 they have to accomplish a
lot
 of tasks in the least
times
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.
Additionally
, they cannot spend
the
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family
time
.
As a result
, there create a
lot
 of
pinance
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penance
finance
 in their mind.
For example
, working in a
grameen
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 phone
company
 they have to maintain
dresscode
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dress code
 always and it creates a
lot
 of hampers in their works. In conclusion, there are many useful sides if employees
wear
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a uniform
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uniform
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uniforms
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.
However
,
negative
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the negative
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 side may rise if workers do not form
a
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proper use of
company
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dresscode
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dress code
.
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