You and some friends want to start a weekly dance club and you have found a hall that would be suitable to hold your meetings. Write a letter to the owner of the hall. In you letter, 1. explain your and your friends project 2. ask if it possible to rent the hall and under the what terms 3. state what day and what timings you would like to use the hall

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

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letter to raise our interest regarding one of your halls that I found

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a newspaper.

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, let me introduce our project and notion. As we are big fans of dance and music, we would like to work in a business

that is

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related to our hobby.

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one of the reasons why we would like to get your hall to open a dance club.

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we have been looking for a suitable room with some specifications for months, we could not find anything else. But, we were luckily found that your room met all of our required facts. So, I was wondering if you could rent your hall with a year lease. Do not worry about the terms, we are pleased to offer the same as your requested amount. If you do not mind, we want to look and check around the actual condition of the room

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before signing. If it is in perfect condition, we would like to use your hall starting from the

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day of April. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Tun Naung Win

tunnaungwin11Thu May 05 2022

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Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

190 words

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social interaction
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The Greeting

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