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Nowadays people around the world are choosing to self-medicate rather than seeing a doctor and using conventional medicine. What are the causes of this change and what effects can be seen as a result?

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Presently, a large number of
people
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 are inclined towards taking
medicines
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 on their own
instead
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 of consulting with a
doctor
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 and taking proper medical procedures.
This
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 approach has reasons
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 as the high cost of doctors' appointments and the need to perform many
tests
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.
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, it has adverse impacts on
people
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 by shifting them to high potency
medicines
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 and various organ
mulfunctions
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malfunctions
malfunction
.
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 with,
people
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 nowadays try to medicate themselves because taking an appointment with a
doctor
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 is a costly affair. To clarify, when
people
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 have to consult a
doctor
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, they need to pay an amount for a specific time and
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 amount is the same for every visit.
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, before starting a
medicine
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 course for any health issue, doctors always require reports of certain
tests
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 and these
tests
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 are
like
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a burden on
people
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. A survey conducted by The Guardian newspaper in March
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 2015 in the UK that 65% of
people
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 left seeing a
doctor
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 or their recommended
medicines
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 because self-medication was a cheaper option.
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, since
people
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 start to take medicine without any advice from
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a doctor
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doctor
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doctors
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, they may not be able to understand the potency of
medicines
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.
As a result
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, they become habitual of high doses which harm their health situation in long run.
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, taking medicine without expert advice may be a reason for organ failure as many oral
medicines
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 are not suitable for digestive organs.
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, taking painkillers or multivitamins without doctors’ advice can damage the liver and kidneys. To conclude, though
people
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 are interested
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into
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 self-medication, they can save a lot of money from doctors' appointments and
tests
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;
however
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,
this
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 trend is not a welcoming one as it can cause many health issues and organ failure.
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