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Some people claim that not enough waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their wastes

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In
this
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 contemporary era, recycling is one of the most debatable concepts. A bunch of personages claim that household
wastages
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are
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 not being recycled adequately and imposing a legal requirement by governments is the sole way to increase recycling. In my opinion,
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 it might be an important step towards increasing the amount of recycled
waste
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, I believe that people should be more aware of their environment and surroundings.
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 with, why people's consciousness is more important than government regulation? The first and most prominent one is that the masses are unable to recycle their household
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 as they do not know the proper way to recycle. To elucidate
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, if the population knows how to utilize
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wastes
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waste
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, most of the
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wastes
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 would not only be recycled but
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 be used in several household activities.
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, from organic
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, it is possible to produce biofuel which can be used in cooking. A survey conducted by ILO in 2015, revealed that on average, 25% of the houses in Bangladesh use bio-plant in order to produce biogas.
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, awareness can be a great factor
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 the quantity of
recycling
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waste
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.
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, imposing laws on recycling
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 by governments can be a driving factor in
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 trend as well. If the government makes recycling Compulsory
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 a legal requirement, people Would be more encouraged to recycle their home's filth.
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, Romania,a country in Europe, utilizes 90% of its
waste
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 that has been produced from houses, where the authority made recycling mandatory for every home. So it is inevitable that implementing a legal requirement is significant as well.
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, in spite of
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the fact that the authorities can be able to highly influence the masses, it is
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public awareness which would play the most essential part.
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, governments should focus on increasing public perception regarding
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 recycling.
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task response
For task achievement, consider providing a more thorough analysis of the advantages and disadvantages of government laws on recycling. Support your arguments with more specific examples and statistics to strengthen your points.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, pay attention to the logical flow of ideas and ensure that each paragraph connects smoothly to the next. Use transition words to guide the reader through your argument and make sure your introduction clearly introduces your stance and the main points you will discuss. Additionally, provide a more definitive conclusion that summarizes your argument effectively.
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