Mrs barrett,an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs barrett. In your letter •suggest how you could help her in her home •say why you would like to do this work • explain when you will and will not be available.

Dear Mrs Jenner I hope you are doing well. I saw your advertisement and writing
this
to inform you that
i
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can assist you in household activities. It has been a long
time
to
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since to

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see you
after
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since

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that spiritual event where we met for the
first
time
. You told me
then
too, that you were looking for someone to help you. I cannot help you at that
time
but
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can help
this
time
as I'll be free
in
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apply

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next
summer. I will help
in
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with

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all the household work like cooking, washing and dishing. I can go to buy
grocery
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groceries

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too.
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I know
english
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English

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so there would be no chance of misinterpretation. I would be available all
the
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apply

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day except in
evening
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the evening

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as
that is
my gym
time
. You know I am very health conscious and do not like to skip a single day at
gym
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the gym

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. I hope you would find me suitable for
this
opportunity. Looking forward
for
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to

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your earliest reply. Yours sincerely Navdeep
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