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the students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph illustrates the data of the
students
 studying in the four English speaking countries and the table represents the percentage of foreign
students
 among the total
students
. Making the relevant comparison between the
year
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 2004 and 2012. Overall, the student's interest in studying abroad has increased over the period of time with more and more
students
 migrating to the English Countries as compared to the
year
 2004.
Moreover
,
USA
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the USA
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 was the most demanded educational destination compared to the rest of the three countries. In the
year
 2004,
USA
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the USA
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 accounted for the highest
number
 of foreign
students
 with
number
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around
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 175. While UK and Australia were equally famous with
students
 around 110 and Canada was the least popular with
students
 less than 50. In regards to 2012
USA
 was still the
number
 one with around 250
students
, Uk and Australia were in the close competition with
number
 200 and 190 respectively. While the
Cananda
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Canada
 was still on the lowest
number
 but bit better from the
year
 2004.
On the other hand
, within the period of 8
years
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 the total percentage for
USA
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the USA
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 had a stable performance at 2%, while there was a slight rise for UK and
Cananda
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Canada
,
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Australia has shown the relatively good progress from 19% to 24%. Being the highest in the
year
 ending 2012.
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