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Some people think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business . Others feel they are opportunity for business .Discuss both side and give your opinion.

Nowadays, climatic conditions and changes
affected
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 all over the world.
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this
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 a major group of
people
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 take
this
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 as a chance and
implementing
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 new methods and ideas of
weather
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reforms
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 in their
business
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 and some others affect these conditions adversely to their profession. In
this
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 essay, I examine both
the
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sides with my opinion regarding the
meritsof
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merit of
 climate change programs.
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this
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, by regarding the positive sides of the movements for the
weather
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fluctuatioins
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fluctuations
fluctuation
, it is understandable that throughout the countries
people
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 are fighting for the protection of environment and existence of nature and life. That means, day by day
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 of human activities the ozone layer
become
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 depleted and
this
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 affects the balance of climatic conditions and
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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. As a result of
this
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, it affects the
people
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economicaprlly
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economically
, socially and physically in their life.
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, farmers and other
small scale
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 industries are running with the help of
weather
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 including rain , summer and winter.
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 , the seasons are changed and it affects the harvesting of grains and vegetables and leads to the destruction of agricultural
field
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fields
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.
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, a survey conducted by Food and
Agriuculture
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Agriculture
organisation
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 in 2021
reveals
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 that
,
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in
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North Indian states had a loss of 71% in annual harvesting because of unexpected rainfall.So, I strongly opine that
,
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 considering these
such
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 situations, give rise to the
reforms
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 against climate change , it is a good
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 for the farmers and ordinary
people
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 to get
motivation
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the motivation
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 to do their
business
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.
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, the protecting
reforms
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 for the ecosystem adversely affect
to
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a group of entrepreneurs.
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, everywhere in the world,
people
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 are
enganged
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engaged
 in the selling of Air
conditioner
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conditioners
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, Refrigerators and some kind of sprays. The Chloro Fluro Carbon produced by these
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such
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products affects the ozone layer .
This
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results
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results in
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the
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a
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 decrease in the production of these
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such house
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houses
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holds
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and it affects the
business
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 of
such
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companys
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companies
 and
became
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causes
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 huge
loss
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losses
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.
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, in India,
ine
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one
 of
leading
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the leading
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 refrigerator
company
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companies
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on
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in
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1990s
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the 1990s
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closed
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due to
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theloss
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the loss
 of production in
market
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the market
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 revealed by
market
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a market
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 survey conducted by Times magazine.
To conclude
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, to a great extent, climate
reforms
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 helped mostly the
people
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 in
primary
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 sector and it is better to implement
such
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 type of reformation to decrease the effects of
weather
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 fluctuation.
And
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also
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 it leads to
the
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a
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 fall in the field of professionals and their
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business
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businesses
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that
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which
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 affects the environment.

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coherence cohesion
The essay addresses both sides of the argument and provides relevant examples. However, the coherence and logical flow of the essay could be improved. The introduction lacks a clear thesis statement and the conclusion does not effectively summarize the main points. Consider organizing the essay into clear paragraphs with topic sentences and supporting details to improve coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates a basic level of task response. It discusses both the positive and negative effects of climate change reforms on business and provides examples to support the points. However, the essay lacks a clear position or opinion on the issue. Additionally, the ideas could be more clearly and comprehensively developed to better address the task.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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