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Space exploration requires vast sums of money. Is the amount of money spent on space research justifiable? Could the money be better spent?

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Nowadays
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 has become a more significant element in the current
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 circumstances.
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 experimentation is more costly and funds must be involved
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 more significant matters. I am in accord with the
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 perspective that in the modern
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space
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 is unavoidable and there are notable advantages.
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, modern
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space
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 is a more Salient subject. Because
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 logically it is directly associated with human activities and planet rotations. In fact, there are numerous relations with
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, weather forecasting is one of the
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, the
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 is moving just like digitally
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, satellite communication is a more significant part
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 it is unable to implement.
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 year in India there was a
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 but we receive
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 alert from government authorities
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 everyone took
precaution
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 whereas
eliminate
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 maximum disaster.
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, the whole
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 all military organizations have been looking the
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 is
eagerly
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because there
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defense
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 and security
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Space
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 is unavoidable in terms of
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 organizations due to
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researches
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countries
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 can identify opponent
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countries
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 military facilities and their geographical structure
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 is a dominant part of all
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 satellite communication has gained lots of remarkable achievements. Part of
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 Government authorities
make
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 sure of rival
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countries
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 movements. I believe that spending the money
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space
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 exhibits multiple advantages and benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • justifiable
  • vast sums of money
  • satellite communications
  • economic benefits
  • climate change
  • atmospheric changes
  • global issues
  • humanitarian needs
  • STEM fields (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • colonization
  • catastrophic events
  • space exploration
  • innovations
  • job creation
  • boosting the economy
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