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One problem face by almost every larger city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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Traffic jam is becoming a common problem for the
people
 living in the city areas.
This
 issue has gained much more scholarly attention, especially in
the
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recent past years.
This
 essay will discuss the reason which has led to traffic
congestions
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 and will provide opinion on how the
people
 of the society as a whole can contribute
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 tackling
with
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this
 problem. Admittedly, it is true that the big cities are getting
over crowded
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 with
people
 and vehicles and there
are
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number
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 of factors responsible for it,
first
 and foremost is, the lack of right
infrastucture
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infrastructure
.
For example
 big cities, in order to
fuction
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function
 properly need a regular
extention
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extension
Extention
 of the roads, flyovers and walking paths, these requirements are often ignored by
Goverment
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Government
 and
this
 results in heavy traffic jams during the peak hours.
Secondly
, the rising cost of public transport,
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 the
people
 these days prefer travelling by their own cars because of the increased cost of the public transport.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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