Write a letter to the council in your town suggesting ways to make the town more accessible

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing in connection with the need
of
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improvement
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the improvement

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of disabled
access
in our town. I would want to make suggestions that will help to solve
this
problem.
Firstly
, there are not enough facilities for the disabled on public transport.
For instance
, I suggest that we should add
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wheelchair

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wheel chair
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wheelchair

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access
to both stations and vehicles. By doing
this
,
people
with mobility issues will feel more
comfortably
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while
traveling
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travelling

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.
Secondly
, a lot of the buildings in the city are not accessible
for
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to

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all
people
.
For example
, there will be an improvement if we install ramps and lifts.
Moreover
, there should be toilets for the disabled.
As a
result
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people
with disabilities will feel equal to
the
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apply

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others and they will not have difficulties
while
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apply

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using public places.
Lastly
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it would be a good idea to create a special disability forum. In order
words
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people
will be able to find a lot of useful information there. The more everyone asks and answers the more facts it will have.
This
way
people
will be well informed about disabled
access
throughout our city. I feel that if we improve facilities on public transport, increase
access
to public
building
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buildings

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and set up a forum to regularly discuss issues,
people
will be
finally
able to enjoy everything in our town. Yours faithfully, Max Campion
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