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Some people say that industrial growth is necessary to solve poverty, but some other people argue that industrial growth his creating environment problem and it should be stopped. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are some who understand and favour the significance of the industrial revolution in curbing the fast-growing menace of poverty. Others ,
however
, accuse it of depleting the
environment
 and find it undesirable.
This
 essay agrees that industrial progress must be supported because it ensures development and employment but the
environment
,too, should be preserved equally. Let us start with the argument supporting the idea of industrial development as a solution to the problem of poverty. Primarily, the advancement in industries and factories ,undoubtedly, boosts the growth of a country, to a great extent if not completely.
This
 is because, they create mass production, and employment and
also
 pay a heavy amount of money to the government in the form of tax. Not only common people but regimes
also
 enjoy the perks associated with
this
.
Secondly
, industrial flourishment enables a nation to import several goods and export raw materials. Ultimately, a country becomes economically healthy and earned money can easily be spent on the betterment of people. Contrary to
this
, there is no qualm that the
environment
 should be protected at the earliest. As humans and all the other living creatures considerably depend on it to survive. Needless to say, industries have been deteriorating it by releasing toxic air and water pollution.They release waste in a huge quantity,
however
, organisations have failed to dump it securely. A survey conducted by WHO concluded that 85% of the
environment
 is depleted by industrial advancement since its inception.
Also
, to operate machines and delivery vehicles, a huge quantity of natural resources is utilised which
also
 puts unavoidable strain on the
environment
. To conclude, even though industrial development has a major role in regulating poverty, the
environment
 is being destroyed as its consequences. I reiterate that authorities must find some mutual techniques so that both industries and the
environment
 can be secured.
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