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As more and more information is available online, the role of textbooks has become obsolete. Therefore, universities should replace traditional books with digital materials. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Books
 are considered to be an important source of knowledge. In the modern era, there are enormous
books
 on various topics which is easily available online and free of cost, which creates a boom for
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online
books
 when
compare
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 to
the
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traditional paper-based
books
. The upcoming paragraphs will detail
out
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the
Techniqualities
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Technicalities
 of my preferred notion with relevant illustrations. To commence with the major demerit of using paper-based
book
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 is
difficulty
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 to preserve them. Carrying those heavy paper
books
 from one place to another place safely is a huge task, especially if someone is living with children and pets as they have
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 to tear paper
books
.
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, it is quite common for people to ignore traditional
books
 because it is too heavy to handle.
Hence
, paper-based is not common in most youngsters. On the flip side,
Ebooks
 are boon for people who
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books
. Since
,
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ebooks
 can be easily stored online.
Ebooks
 are not heavy to carry nor can they be torn by children or pets at home.
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 Amazon Kindle can store a variety of
books
 on various topics with a
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hug
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 capacity to store plenty of
books
 with
a
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 additional function of extending the storage capacity
incase
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 if it is required. Moving forth, another major advantage of using
ebooks
 is
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it
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 can be accessed from anywhere and anytime. Borrowing is easier among friends by just sharing the link, which earlier took days and months for someone to return the borrowed
books
.
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Ebooks
 have multiple copies available
,
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 so that one does not need to wait to read the book. To put it crispy, I would like to pen down by saying that, in the shorter run,
this
 may seem
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 as it needs every single book to be turned online and it may be
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 but in the longer run,
ebooks
 will
bollosom
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blossom
 with the advance in computer technology.
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