Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than earn a lots of money. Others disagree and think that good salary leads to better life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, there is no doubt huge income offers beneficial for the family. While some certain individuals think that
satisfaction
at the Use synonyms
job
is more crucial than running behind Use synonyms
money
. Others claim that Use synonyms
handsome
Correct article usage
a handsome
salary
is important to live Use synonyms
in
a comfortable lifestyle Change preposition
apply
in
all over the world. In my opinion, Change preposition
apply
however
, I believe that in most cases Linking Words
this
depends on the situation of the Linking Words
person
whether he has Use synonyms
family
to feed or look after only himself as a single Add an article
a family
person
.
Some people who state that high payable work or profession is necessary in order to have a good life and they might Use synonyms
be think
that because the majority people live in a joint family and most cases whole family depends on one Change the verb form
be thinking
person
that mother, father or an adult elder family member of their family. Use synonyms
For instance
, in most Asian countries the leader is the father and he has to take care of his unemployed wife and all children. Some of the family Linking Words
has
around three to five children. Not only has that but Correct subject-verb agreement
have
also
needed some Linking Words
money
to look after his parents, as well as his brought family members Use synonyms
such
as siblings, uncle and aunt. Linking Words
This
will clearly Linking Words
indicates
the importance of Change the verb form
indicate
huge
Correct article usage
a huge
salary
will always Use synonyms
fulfill
Change the spelling
fulfil
for
their different type of individual needs. Change preposition
apply
In other
Linking Words
words
more Add a comma
,words
money
Use synonyms
need
to gain better and healthy life for all the family members. And Change the verb form
needs
also
huge income will give more chances to save Linking Words
money
in the bank or to buy properties for their future. Use synonyms
For
illustrates Change preposition
To
this
, children need proper higher education and suitable marriage Linking Words
who
wish all parents.
Correct pronoun usage
that
On the other hand
, those who tell that enjoy at their Linking Words
job
Use synonyms
at
all the time is more valuable than Change preposition
apply
big
Correct article usage
a big
salary
and he would Use synonyms
be continue
his Change the verb form
continue
job
with Use synonyms
satisfaction
and it will lead to get more creativity and more productivity and gain success in the company or the office, Use synonyms
Linking Words
however
If someone is not happy with his career automatically effect for him emotionally and physically. Add a comma
,however
Hence
he has Linking Words
chance
to get some health problems Add an article
a chance
the chance
such
as Linking Words
diabetic
, high blood pressure or cardiac disease. Replace the word
diabetes
Therefore
, it Linking Words
is consider
to think Change the verb form
is considered
for
Change preposition
about
human's
Change noun form
human
job
Use synonyms
satisfaction
in their Use synonyms
job
.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
nevertheless
, Linking Words
who
earn Correct pronoun usage
those who
huge
amount of Correct article usage
a huge
salary
would Use synonyms
fulfill
Change the spelling
fulfil
needs
Correct article usage
the needs
the
Change preposition
of the
person
and his whole family members and Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
job
Use synonyms
satisfaction
make Use synonyms
very
important role in the life and to consider it in to account.Correct article usage
a very
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