You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer . In your letter , Say how you feel about his performance Give details of your musical activities Explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

Dear Jay, I am writing to thank you for your outstanding performance yesterday. I was over the moon when I listened to your powerful words.
Although
classical music is not my cup of tea, I enjoyed your performance and your pleasant voice as well. My friends
also
were happy with your professional way of singing. I have some music-related activities.
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, I have been playing the guitar for seven years so much that I mastered it. All my friends praise me for my professional performance. I
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played guitar at some local concerts. I sometimes go to play the guitar in public places to increase my popularity among people. Even though I know that you are always busy, I would like you to share one of my videos on your Facebook page since you have many followers or you can comment positively on one of my videos. I hope you will consider supporting me favourably. Thank you in advance. yours sincerely, Ayman Shabka
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