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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money.Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, minority
languages
 are facing unprecedented dangers and are on the verge of distinction. While some
people
 argue that the protection of these
languages
 is needless and would waste
money
, I believe that
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 spoken
languages
also
 deserve our protection and
government
 should give financial support to ensure their survival. On the one hand, it is understandable why some
people
 argue that it would be a waste of
money
 if
government
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 spends financial resources on these
languages
. In their eyes,
money
 should be used in a more appropriate way,
such
 as
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people
 in need. Surely, in many countries,
for example
, the areas of technology and education are unequally developed and numerous
people
 are suffering from the underdevelopment of basic infrastructure. Only in rural areas of Congo, more
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that
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 800
thousands
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 households are inaccessible to
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 simply because signal towers had not been established there.
Likewise
, students
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 in Chinese mountainous areas could not afford to buy textbooks, not
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 the tablets that could facilitate their learning. In
this
 way, if
people
’s basic needs could not be satisfied, there is certainly no point in investing large amounts of
money
 to protect the
languages
 seldom used in
people
’s daily life.
On the other hand
, some
people
 claim that minority
languages
, similar to other commonly-used
languages
, should be preserved and handed down between generations, as they are
also
 an indispensable cultural element of an ethnic group. It is widely acknowledged that language is a defining part of
culture
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 and reflects a nation’s history, cultural values, traditions and customs. Nothing is more vivid and persuasive than a language to demonstrate to our posterity the splendid history of a nation.
For instance
, by speaking their mother tongue, Indian students in North America could learn more details about the lifestyles and thoughts of their ancestors, which contribute to
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 their cultural identity. That’s why
Canadian
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government
 spend hundreds of millions of dollars to encourage educational institutes to promote the use of these
languages
. Without the financial support of public authorities, these cultural heritages are doomed to disappear in the foreseeable future. To conclude, while protecting minority
languages
 seems to consume public
money
, I firmly believe that
government
 should mobilise financial resources for the sake of conserving human spiritual wealth.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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