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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
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 chart demonstrates how ownership of electrical appliances has changed percentage-wise,
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 the other
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graph
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 illustrates how many hours are spent on housework on a weekly basis both in one particular country and during the course of almost a century from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, the first
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 displays sharp upward trends in the use of electrical appliances during the period with a fluctuation in the middle of the period for the washing machines.
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, the
second
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line
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graph
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 depicts a plunge at the beginning of the span followed by a modest decline. As
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is evident in the first
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graph
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, the percentage of
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people using refrigerators and vacuum cleaners surged during the era from 0 per cent for refrigerators to 100 per cent in 1980 and plateaued for the following 40 years until 2019.
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vacuum cleaners were used in 1920 at about 30% and soared to 100% in 2000, remaining the same amount for the final 20 years.
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, the usage of washing machines was higher than both refrigerators and vacuum cleaners in the 1920s (40%) and kept going up but not as sharp as the other two up to 70% in 1960.
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, it fell gradually to almost 10%
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 continued increasing accounting for a little over 70% which was about 30% lower than the other two appliances.
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 chart, people did household chores about 50 hours a week at the beginning of the era, plummeting to 20 per cent in 1960 but afterwards, the trend started decreasing slightly and almost levelled out at approximately 10% in 2019.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, graph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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